写作哀求:
1. 字数在100词旁边。开头已给出,不计入词数;
2. 书写规范,分段合理,要点完好。
3. 不得涌现真实人名校名等个人信息。

The Trip to Harbin
This winter holiday, I plan to visit Harbin. Here are some information about the city I learn from the Internet.
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松柏老师写的范文:
The Trip to Harbin
This winter holiday, I plan to visit Harbin. Here are some information about the city I learn from the Internet.
If we choose to travel in Harbin, we can get thoughtful service like free hot drinks in the street、free pick-up at the station and free tour guide at the places of interest. There are many famous attractions in Harbin, and we can enjoy ourselves doing different things there. In Central Street, we can do some shopping. At Yabuli Ski Resort, skiing and skating are good choices. Also, we can see different sculptures in Harbin ice and snow world. What’s more, eating delicious food will make our trip a better experience.
I am really looking forward to travelling in Harbin!
审题思路及范文讲评:
从题干可知,这篇书面表达的主题是为自己未来的一次哈尔滨之旅做攻略,以是人称选定为第一人称,时态选用一样平常现在时和一样平常将来时。从表格信息可以创造,表格的第二竖列和第三竖列是可以根据其内在的逻辑关系进行信息整合的,以是进行表达整合,避免零星表达,可以提升文章措辞的逻辑整体性和思维含量。作为书面表达,一定要确保构造完全,以是在全部表述完详细信息之后,一定要进行总结,确保文章实现构造闭环。
松柏老师供应的这篇范文,除了严格按照审题构造、时态哀求、人称定位和要点覆盖,同时也表示在措辞内容的逻辑整合,比如:景点和可以做什么,可以逻辑整合为“在什么景点可以做什么”。进行要点表述时,把稳句式变换,避免措辞重复。为了逻辑清晰,条理分明,用一些衔接词,像also、what’s more来连接,实现高下文的紧密联系。
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